Cold, Damp Sheets

[Nietzche]

'Cause I'm a man, not a boy
And there are things you can't avoid
You have to face them
When you're not prepared to face them

Perhaps there is a dripping faucet
gently announcing its presence, neglected
or perhaps this space reverberates
with the metronomic rhythms
of an unassuming silence.

Alone he drifts with improvident waves
until a rustle of probative subtlety
sends ripples through his stream of unconsciousness.

He is alert

to the peripheral shadow
passing patiently, pensively
and pausing overheard
to adumbrate a clandestine clarity.

Tonight he will face shadows and drift unwillingly.

Tomorrow he will rise quietly and breath shallowly
pausing only to acknowledge
cold, damp sheets.

 

[harraser]

nights of sweat, tears, fear, pain,and i think worst of all unsurity and question... theyre not easy..

ive always liked your writing Nietzche, even though you usually make me go running for the dictionary. and I like this piece probably best of all that i remember. it feels more vulnerable and real than some of your others.. at least to me. nice work.

 

[neverwas]

Tomorrow he will rise quietly and breath shallowly
pausing only to acknowledge
cold, damp sheets.

ur choice of words to describe this peice is perfection. this part really captured me.

 

[katmeow]

Beautiful... the kind of work which should be read aloud.

 

[Raz]

^^^Actually, yeah...that didn't occur to me until kat said it, but definitely would work great as a spoken word...

 

[Altered_Soul9]

This piece really captured me and made me read it. I hope that makes sense. Very Nice

 

[Frosty da snowman]

your work allways drags me in. Great read

 

[PoetessAurora]

I demand a public reading.

 

[up all night]

I demand more regular posts.

And yeah I agree with harraser... you make me run for the dictionary.

 

[skywise]

i think this poem is a lot better than some of the other stuff you have posted (which is saying quite a bit because i think the other stuff is pretty good too)

 

[E-girl]

hey there! its been awhile since i read something by you.
i wasn't disappointed

 

[Painless Hurt]

This is the first poem I've read by you and I really enjoyed it. Full of description and emotion.

 

[titania]

Sweetie, wow...that was beautiful!

miss you!
xxx

 

[Frosty da snowman]

had to bump this. When you get published let me know I will be the first inline. !!

 

[Android]

meh...

 

[E-girl]

yeah i'm glad you bumped this -- i really enjoyed the word flow the first time i read it. even though i had to look up a bunch of words in it to get the full effect of what you were saying, lol. but i just love the way the words fall together.

 

[justsomeguy]

so, why do you want to be a lawyer?

 

[katmeow]

Still fabulous.

Nietzche... post more!!

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

Yay! That was awsome.

 

[Frosty da snowman]

Still love this.