.:Closer-To-The-Edge:.

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

.:Closer-To-The-Edge:.

She teeters closer
To the edge
Of reason

Trapped folorn
Inside a train of
Hope

She glides
Soaring through the clouds
Of murky disenchanted thoughts
That run and bite and clog
Her silty wilting mind.

 

[ev0l]

i really enjoy the way it ends

very good finish to this piece

 

[kazza_baby]

i love the flow of this, and the way you've emphasised certain words. They make the raw emotion behind the piece easier to see.

 

[katmeow]

So appropriate for the way I'm feeling lately.

Lovely work

Nice to see you posting again.

 

[Scrooge'sOldLady19]

It has a nice feeling in it.

 

[mini sari]

Nice. But I feel as though the title is rather trite.

 

[RareForm]

Her silty wilting mind.

You said silty, YES! :D

I felt this 'enchanting'

 

[neverwas]

Nice. But I feel as though the title is rather trite.

i think the title is perfect. nice work lovely

glad to see you back in this neck of the woods

xox