Clocks

[RareForm]

I've reached an age when people give me clocks,
wooden travel clocks inscribed with warm wishes,
leather clad mantle clocks on brass feet,
digital age radio watches with atomic precision.

What are they telling me about time?
that I am now so short of it I must be given more?
Is this their way of extending my impoverished hours?
Sympathetic magic for the machine age?

Perhaps they hope to soothe some worry they reflect
from my face and slowly moving hands.
It may be that they see an all too casual
attitude as I jerk myself through the hours of my days.

I don't know.

I accept their gifts and grow my little collection -
putting clocks upon my desk, upon my mantle, on my walls.
I strap one watch to my wrist and place the others
where they can be grabbed up at a moment's notice,

and yet I never notice them, never notice what's the time.

And this then now is what has
happened to my time:
It has futured itself into a gift
that I don't know how to use.

 

[TiberCross]

i really like this alot. you are much more observant, analytical, intelligent, than i had given you credit for.

 

[DG]

I really like this one as well. My 2nd fav

I love the insight you have.

 

[katmeow]

Really nice work... bit different to your normal style... but good!

 

[RareForm]

I'm glad that you all liked it; I was worried that the phrasing was too pithy, awkward, and annoyingly redundant.

 

[neverwas]

the phrasing of this was well suited to ur writting. ur descriptive words and style only but improoves each time you post.

and yet I never notice them, never notice what's the time.

this part here was very poignant (to me anyways) it made me stop and think

 

[up all night]

It's the little turns of phrase that establish you [in my mind] as an awesome writer. Things like "as I jerk myself through the hours of my days" describe perfectly the way I don't just drag myself through my days as much as I have to yank myself through.

This whole piece was as soft and gentle as it was jarring. Great topic and really welll done.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Even when you step out of your norm you still manage to impress! The phrasing makes the tone of the poem, and it works well!

 

[punktuality]

I love this...
very clever.
bravo.

 

[Raz]

I really liked this as well...I love some of the phrases in this piece, very clever but not wanky.

 

[cherub]

I take this well, with your life changing events going on in your life clocks definately can be a sign of what you appear to be what life is in the future. outstanding.

I am just more excited to see what comes next with you.

*hugs*