clear

[little_e]

i'm not sure if i'm right
or even if this is something
i should say
but
you hold back
don't tell me what you should
and i'm robbed of feeling
i make my words
vibrant and alive
coloring the air
so that you can see me
and know me
my eyes stretch out
longing for sight
but everything you say is clear
and i see through you

 

[Noodle]

Interesting start. There is a sentiment more complex and interesting round about that first part, your opening. It could have been expounded upon more for sure.
I'm not sure any of us can truly see through anyone or thing, even our relfected gaze in a mirror.

Big shaka and props to you for sharing dude.

[This message has been edited by Noodle (edited 09 August 2000).]