been awhile

[ev0l]

just got the internet back and i'm drunk

these are lyrics, not poetry. or atleast thats how i wrote them.
similare but not the same i guess. atleast in my mind.
anwho


its been twenty years and nothing yet
not one girl
it spending years with burns and matches
depending on your friends and drugs

its splendid that your on my mind
you're not my type and i can't keep you off my mind
it splinters that i've caught, for tactful thinking, that are twice my size.

its tin sinks that have bent the drinking, bent the bottles taking lives.
witness me in taking on the things that i had left behind

shiftless shaking picturesque and printed right between the lines
i'll show you things you'd thought you'd held before just without the lies
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unfinished by a long shot
any suggestions or comments.

 

[plazma]

Not a bad start, the first two sections could probably use a little polishing. I really like the last two sections though, they flow quite nicely and have a deeper quality to them I guess.

Good effort.

-plaz-

 

[Scrooge'sOldLady19]

Pretty good.

 

[doesntmatter]

under a different name now after the "if you don't have access to your old email" thing. i'm actually trying to fix this one. wish me luck.