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not too bad. to be completely honest I'm not crazy about but I think its definitely going somewhere. But it needs to end somewhere ya know? It seems too "floaty" I guess. Definitely likely that that was intentional, but I feel it'd benefit from "tying together" at the end ya know? Like really drive home what you are trying to express.

Keep at it man :)
 
yeah this is just a beginning, just thought about it and had to write it down somewhere before i forgot; i'll try and make an end to it next week

i'm 23, i start uni in a few months studying literature, thought i better start writing in preparation =)
 
Yup yup this is a good start. Haha I'm in a poetry class at my community college so I tend to critique peoples writing here a lot I hope I don't come off as an asshole haha.
 
copelandia. said:
yeah this is just a beginning, just thought about it and had to write it down somewhere before i forgot; i'll try and make an end to it next week

i'm 23, i start uni in a few months studying literature, thought i better start writing in preparation =)
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be sure to post it again so we can analyze it. writing is as important to reading as reading is to writing
 
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