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Asleep On a Train

silverwheel

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St. Louis, MO
I have tried to savor every image,
every sip from the cup of sensations;
have learned to walk with a better tempo,
in better step with a private soundtrack.

I have observed the scenes with resonance;
old friends by the restaurant putting on
their winter coats, parting in an evening
seemingly filmed through a deep blue filter.

I have heard my private rhythm come back
in an echo, magnified by towers
of steel, of brick and of glass, carrying
the overtones, the backing and the lead.

And I have yearned for relief, to visit
a different land, to breathe a different air,
to loose my ears from the cacophony
of that bristling urbanity, yet now,

in this small, quiet town, I cannot sleep
with this silence suffocating my thoughts.
Lying awake, I remember a girl
asleep on the train, head back, mouth agape,

tuning herself to passing bricks and leaves
and a blanket of comforting white noise.
 
i find the majority of this poem hard to read, and follow. it took me a while to realise that it is only once you are back in the country that i start to be able to feel relaxed. I guess it could get to be an old feeling pretty quickly :)
 
I like it...not liking where you are, or where you were...just the transition.
 
Lying awake, I remember a girl
asleep on the train, head back, mouth agape,

tuning herself to passing bricks and leaves
and a blanket of comforting white noise.

These are fantastic lines!
 
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