Alchemy & Angels: A Single Arrow, A Shooting Star

[StatuS tickleS]

A single arrow
brings singing while soaring
through the sky
Softly landing
Sentimentally imprinting
its' pigment of paramour
poking it's song in my eye.

Saying,"what's wrong with this guy?"
Then it picked me up
and took me along for the ride
I began singing before long
and couldn't hide.

Why! I AM IN THE SKY!

Whistling words
and riding an arrow
Visibly heard
reciting the prayer of love
Contrary to the despair
in which i was previously engulfed
Now...NOW i was above

A shooting star
Sinks, dreaming my story
As it dies
Often ranting
Incidentally, dissenting
our vision of evermore
invoking the wrongs in which we reside.

Saying,"Atone for these lies"
Like Icarus
It cooked and moaned in the sky
Then began screaming at the thought
it could no longer fly
Night..time, they are alive

Fizzling first
and divng like a sparrow
mystical bird
igniting the hair of earth
Contrary to the air
in which it previously hung
Now...NOW it was a part of us.

 

[Raz]

I liked how this starts off all whimsical, but naturally progresses to becoming something much deeper (without hitting us over the head with it)...well done!

 

[RareForm]

A shooting star
Sinks, dreaming my story
As it dies
Often ranting
Incidentally, dissenting
our vision of evermore
invoking the wrongs in which we reside.

your presence and demeanor with words is envied.