a poem.....

[wickedbabe]

this poem was written last year when i was 17
it is entitled "She"
Heroin is her heroine
She smokes crack to get back to a kaleidoscope of black
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(there is a stanza here that i can't remember)
Dancing dark angel of death
Unborn kisses on her breath
Exquisite pain that knows no name
Left alone to die in shame
whats your opinion?

 

[lilygirl]

this poem is gorgeous. i'm always amazed when people can rhyme and make it seem natural. superb

~lil
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i cannot be stereotyped. i cannot be contained.
therapy is expensive, poppin bubble wrap is cheap. you decide.
sn~ sparkleylily

 

[wickedbabe]

thanks heaps for your feedback lily, i'm going to put the missing stanza in soon and the poem will improve even more!

 

[yoUr bLiSS]

"unborn kisses on her breath"
beautiful.....

 

[wickedbabe]

i'm back again! thanx bliss for your nice comments, here is the full poem complete with missing stanza for your sensory enjoyment
"She"
Heroin is her heroine
She smokes crack to get back to a kaleidoscope of black
Boundaries blur
Shapes shift and recur
Her anguished feet are drawn to the beat
Dancing dark angel of death
Unborn kisses on her breath
Exquisite pain that knows no name
Left alone to die in shame

like it?

 

[E-girl]

haunting words... beautifully pieced together.
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E-girl
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