A poem for the opiate naive to consider

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So, to be 100% transparent, I found this on another site, I take no claim in writing this. The reason I post it is because I think it hits the nail on the head.

I destroy homes, I tear families apart, I take your children, and that's just the start.

I'm more costly than diamonds, more precious than gold, the sorrow I bring is a sight to behold.

If you need me, remember I'm easily found, I live all around you - in schools and in town

I live with the rich, I live with the poor, I live down the street, and maybe next door.

My power is awesome, try me you'll see, But if you do, you may never break free.

Just try me once and I might let you go, But try me twice, and I'll own your soul.

When I possess you, you'll steal and you'll lie, You do what you have to just to get high.

The crimes you'll commit for my narcotic charms Will be worth the pleasure you'll feel in your arms.

You'll lie to your mother, you'll steal from your dad, when you see their tears, you should feel sad.

But you'll forget your morals and how you were raised, I'll be your conscience,I'll teach you my ways.

I take kids from parents, and parents from kids, I turn people from God, and separate friends.

I'll take everything from you, your looks and your pride, I'll be with you always, right by your side.

You'll give up everything - your family, your home, your friends, your money,then you'll be alone.

I'll take and take, till you have nothing more to give, when I'm finished with you, you'll be lucky to live.

If you try me be warned - this is no game, If given the chance, I'll drive you insane.

I'll ravish your body, I'll control your mind, I'll own you completely, your soul will be mine.

You won't be able to lie in your bed, the voices you'll hear, from inside your head.

The sweats, the shakes, the pain your body will feel, I want you to know, I took the wheel.

But then it's too late, and you'll know in your heart, that you are mine, and we shall not part.

You'll regret that you tried me, they always do, but you came to me, not I to you.

You knew this would happen, many times you were told, but you challenged my power, and chose to be bold.

You could have said no, and just walked away, If you could live that day over,now what would you say?

I'll be your master, you will be my slave, I'll even go with you, when you go to your grave.

Now that you have met me, what will you do? Will you try me or not? It's all up to you.

I can bring you more misery than words can tell,Come take my hand, let me lead you to HELL.
 
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Yo bro a great piece. I thought everything perfectly rhymed with rhythm until the 8th line from the end. Perhaps you need to edit it to make it perfect. I'd also like to know where you found it. Donny.
 
So, to be 100% transparent, I found this on another site, I take no claim in writing this. The reason I post it is because I think it hits the nail on the head.

I destroy homes, I tear families apart, I take your children, and that's just the start.

I'm more costly than diamonds, more precious than gold, the sorrow I bring is a sight to behold.

If you need me, remember I'm easily found, I live all around you - in schools and in town

I live with the rich, I live with the poor, I live down the street, and maybe next door.

My power is awesome, try me you'll see, But if you do, you may never break free.

Just try me once and I might let you go, But try me twice, and I'll own your soul.

When I possess you, you'll steal and you'll lie, You do what you have to just to get high.

The crimes you'll commit for my narcotic charms Will be worth the pleasure you'll feel in your arms.

You'll lie to your mother, you'll steal from your dad, when you see their tears, you should feel sad.

But you'll forget your morals and how you were raised, I'll be your conscience,I'll teach you my ways.

I take kids from parents, and parents from kids, I turn people from God, and separate friends.

I'll take everything from you, your looks and your pride, I'll be with you always, right by your side.

You'll give up everything - your family, your home, your friends, your money,then you'll be alone.

I'll take and take, till you have nothing more to give, when I'm finished with you, you'll be lucky to live.

If you try me be warned - this is no game, If given the chance, I'll drive you insane.

I'll ravish your body, I'll control your mind, I'll own you completely, your soul will be mine.

You won't be able to lie in your bed, the voices you'll hear, from inside your head.

The sweats, the shakes, the pain your body will feel, I want you to know, these are all gifts from me.

But then it's too late, and you'll know in your heart, that you are mine, and we shall not part.

You'll regret that you tried me, they always do, but you came to me, not I to you.

You knew this would happen, many times you were told, but you challenged my power, and chose to be bold.

You could have said no, and just walked away, If you could live that day over,now what would you say?

I'll be your master, you will be my slave, I'll even go with you, when you go to your grave.

Now that you have met me, what will you do? Will you try me or not? It's all up to you.

I can bring you more misery than words can tell,Come take my hand, let me lead you to HELL.


Damn how true!! I LOVE the poem, but hate the meaning it portrays.


Jen
 
Even the words sub forum in arts and intertainment forum but the 8th stanza from the end has got me bewittled.


Editing, the poem is beautiful in its own sad way. Thanks again it was worth reading a third time.
 
Even the words sub forum in arts and intertainment forum but the 8th stanza from the end has got me bewittled.


Editing, the poem is beautiful in its own sad way. Thanks again it was worth reading a third time.

As requested, I edited the 8th to the last line. I think it flows nicely. Thanks for all the kind replies.

Bob
 
100% honest, wish I could take credit. Ill pm you the site I got it from. Im just not sure I can post that to a public thread. Thank you though, I am flattered, and it hit home with me as well.

Bob
 
great poem 100% on point, not only for heroin but addiction in general.
As an recovering addict the end stings, i know that its true, and i feel nothing but relief to be sober now...
 
Sorry vit, :(

Hang in there man,

Bob

the truth should be told and heard no matter how painful so I'm glad you posted it! I was craving the hell out of opiates before I ever got physically addicted. They just do that to some of us. Thanks for the poem. Did you create it?
 
the truth should be told and heard no matter how painful so I'm glad you posted it! I was craving the hell out of opiates before I ever got physically addicted. They just do that to some of us. Thanks for the poem. Did you create it?

I wish I could say yes, but no. I only edited the 8th to the last to make it flow better. I agree also, the truth will get you where you want to go, while lying will keep you stagnant if not worse.

Bob
 
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