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A Dear John Letter To My Chemical Pleasures

His Name Is Frank

His Name Is Frank

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How much do I hate you? Let me count the ways.

All of the days you've left me dazed

All of the weeks you've made me weak

All of the years you've masked the fears in my mind

While feeding them slowly at the same time

This is my hour of power in which I rid myself of you

All of the time you've wasted

This false sense I have tasted

So wrong

So long

Verse chorus verse of the same sad song

It's so foreign to me

To have the ability to deal with the feel without constantly having the pill in me

Inhale,in Heaven

Exhale,in Hell again

Every day now a battle

Fighting the rattle of temptation

The sound so deafening and overwhelming at first

Will weaken if you don't feed it and quench it's thirst

I'm turning temptation into aggravation

A true friend is all you've claimed to be

While truely you are my worst enemy

Now that I'm finally fully awake

I see all the damage you've left in your wake

All the hearts and new starts you've made me forsake

The memories are churning

Every day learning

Not wanting to make the same old mistakes

You and I have had our fun

Now I can say we're finally done

But I'm no fool to assume the battle is won

You and I will always be one
 
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Nice one... cleverly conceived, and it tugs at me. I'm sure most of us can relate. Elegant ending too. :)

Fighting the rattle of temptation
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"Rattle" seems like the perfect word here - I don't think I've ever heard temptation described that way, but it works so well...
 
Thank you (WORDY) I have just finally reached the point to where I knew if I kept going the route of excess I was going,that I would soon be dead or in jail for a long time. The similarities to substance abuse and being in a horrible relationship sort of came out in what I wrote. That's why it almost reads like a break-up letter.
 
i strongly agree with wordy. the choice of words in this piece maginfies the gentle persuasive words that tug at the mind and heart.
rare and well done
 
Wow. Two glowing reviews,by MODS,no less. Thank you too,colicolo. Being that I wrote it between waiting on customers at a convenience store,that really encourages me to actually sit down and write more!
 
That was beautiful...it reminded me of DXM, and crack, and every other drug I've ever done.

Thank you for that.:)
 
Great one. When I hovered over the subject and saw the little "preview" of a few lines, I thought it'd have a repetitive rhyme scheme or maybe be a little redundant in general, but nope, I'm glad I read the whole thing!

"All of the years you've masked the fears in my mind

While feeding them slowly at the same time"

Love it.
 
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