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2 newbie poems

botaanik

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Just thought I post my two poems from my hdd. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICSM is welcome any criticsm is welcome....


Me's

You wake up in the morning, knowing
that today isn't different from all
You think, is this to be ment
Or is this your mind that is bent.

Walking down the hall, long four wall's
thinking, are thees people, people like me
Or my sckitzo imaginery friends
That are locked inside my head

Then they will tell you, over and over
that you are alone, alone in your head
They follow you every room you go
You try to get rid of them
But they don't accept with the answer NO
Saying their're real, real as it can be,
just wait, wait and you'll see.

One of them is me, me who I am
Is it paranoid me, evil me or ignorant me
When you try to be youself
They woun't let you to be yourself
It's hard to choose the right one
Who protects you and is you

Once comes time when nature chooses for you
And then it's only two way road
Mental Institution or reality check
Come back, me come back and lay back
Just to be me, me who I am


This was ment to be song that I wrote for guitar solo. Ahhh...here it is.


Suicidal freak who needs a sleep

Every one of my day, I've been seeked
Seeked this answer that will solve my problems
Now it's time to meet, meet with myself
There's no way out, I have to do it soon
I'm freak, freak I am and freak I will be
Ordinary freak who haven't got sleep

Freak, meet, seek, peek, leak, peep, sleep, speak, weak

I need to take a life-leak, just once
I don't ask much, only knife to take my life
Now's my life peek, it's not getting any closer than now
Don't ask how, it's a my subconcious voice who say's so
How did I got this low
Your so weak, so freak
Theres now way back, only on you must go
I can't take this realty anymore, I'm gona crack
Only sorrow is left to my heart
Where isn't nothing else than The Answer: suicede

Freak, meet, seek, peek, leak, peep, sleep, speak, weak

If I could, I will take my life
But deep indside, my heart-warped voice tell's me
That it's way too soon, just wait, wait and suffer
It's getting untolerable, there's no madeication for it
Only knife, sharp silver knife that passes thruu veins
I see this neon red blood, tainted neon red blood
Behinde my eye-lides, flowing down my skin
So desperate that I think or are thees my voices who tell
Kill, kill, just kill yourself freak, we'll wait and see
How you blood will be free from the body that is full of hate
You gona crack, when we're taking snack sit back or crack.

Freak, meet, seek, peek, leak, peep, sleep, speak, weak
Sleeping Freak crack, only crack so I can lay back, crack
 
Sounds like your head's been in some dark places, hon. I like the first one better than the second, if only because I think I can personally identify with it more.

I hope you post more. You'll find your writing evolves the more you post!

Welcome to Words :)
 
Good job, bro. You were always one of my favorite posters on the Psychedelic forum. Then you kind of disappeared, but I'm glad to see you back and posting- and I like the poems. :)
 
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