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12/03/01

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One day I will say goodbye
to the only thing worth fighting for
you don't know my passions or
what it's like to finally sink your
flat bare feet into the shattered glass
you once so carefully tiptoed on.
We'll play out the last scene
of this blissful zombie ignorance
abandon all sanity and
risk the rock bottom low
just for the possible high of the up.
I used to know everything
but I lost myself somewhere between
the contagious mess of
mistaken identity that everyone
carries with them.
I found myself amid the
sweet clear screams and
the rusty red blood
of pain released to the
reckless highs of a euphoric dream
well worth every moment of the lows
until i disappear again
into the grey oblivion of neutrality.
[ 10 December 2001: Message edited by: BiNkYbAbEz ]
 
This is really good, very good imagery and stuff.. if you're wanting helpful criticism, my only comment is that perhaps you could use some more punctuation to increase the effects of your phrasing.
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