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1.03.04: Apart

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Maybe if I'd flown East when you wanted me to...
I guess I'm still a child in my fear of flying
fat Italian men with beer-breath
and being ordinary.
Three things to be afraid of doesn't seem that much to me
but the might-have-beens won't leave me alone.
Maybe if I wasn't so... consuming.
Dragon-like.
I should have been Joan of Arc.

Yes I've missed you too and do you remember who I am?
This could have been easier but my life is like giving birth.
(Why should I elaborate? I'm only singing to myself here in the dark)
I should have met you for lunch when you called. I know.
I read that book for a month yesterday
but the ending was always the same.

We could blame this on so many things really
but I never got a chance to say goodbye.
Many things are changing and I am not the least of them.
(How do you grieve for what you never had?)
Once I sat on a porch, smoking, and cared.

Freedom was never the issue. I should have flown East.
 
I liked it, it feels so formed (like tradit rhymed poetry) but by being unrhymed it seems more fluid, esspecially the first stanza, I really like your style. :)
 
There has always been something, in everything you write, that gets under my skin and draws me back to your words. I wish you hadn't deleted the rest.
 
Wow, I can't believe this got bumped. I didn't even realize it was still on Bluelight. Thanks, up all night. You're part of the reason I'm still trying to write anything anymore.
 
Fantastic bump.

The first stanza seems so leftfield, but rings so true at the same time. Always a great thing to pull off in my book. :)
 
i like your imagery anonyme. this piece feels like something i pulled straight from my guts, like words i didn't have but feelings that were there. great piece
 
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