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Ashley

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Where out thou?
Wife of my heart,
The pain of missing you,
Puts holes in my heart

No method of contact
Longest ticking clock
6 years down the track

Are you alive, my dear?
Or in a gutter somewhere
south of here?

Oh, how I miss you Jessica..
Please erase my stomach

You will.
 
I can relate to your longing, a place where I've sat in different points. Your posts in here are always of quality. Post here more often.
 
Thank you mate, I really appreciate the kind words. I'm an aspiring writer, albeit half assed, writing rarely. But I'm going to try and write more regularly and post more here if I can. Are you referring to my other post http://www.bluelight.ru/vb/threads/270885-Confessions-of-a-guilty-mind? I'll post it here for those that missed it, was a while ago now, let me know what you guys think:

Confessions of a guilty mind

Hiding in my bed, my blanket kept me warm
Outside in the real world, brewing was a storm
Four years ago, for the first time in my life
I didn't feel alone but ferociously alive

I remember it like it was yesterday, my ear glued to the phone
Talking to my soul mate, not putting on a show
Answering her questions, talking of dreams and hope
The power of an answer, I was too young to know

She asked of me, a question that came as a surprise
Is that cliff high enough, that if I jumped I'd surely die
Childish and innocent I said in my reply
Babe, sure as shit there's no way you'd land alive

How the fuck was I to know, that she would still try
Maybe if I'd answered differently, she'd still be by my side
My beautiful baby Skye, you were too far young to die
Still whenever I think of you, I can't help but cry

These are the confessions, of my guilty mind.
 
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Yeah. Everytime you post it's real, from the heart. Definitely make more new shit.
 
Loved these immensely particularly "Confessions of a guilty mind".

Cosign New's sentiment, keep posting.
 
Pity how you've spent your coin,
My pockets still sing in stride,
You've set the standard now,
This time

Creeping vine, torturing souls,
Modern day witch,
Torturing mine

So, now that, witch
You've bled me dry
Why not turn into a raven,
Then take to the sky

Fly,
And as you fly,
Life is eternal, I shall fear not,
Beware of my eye, it will be watching
You
 
Started another thread for this one, but I figured I'd post them all together in here. Hope that's okay. :)

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Part and parcel, the missing link
Before or after, minutes move in circles
Terror struck me unrestrained
Penniless and stability has lost it's clock

Raindrops dancing in puddles
Concrete angels that paint the landscape
A turn I must make, left or right
Flip a coin

Dance with the devil
In the backstreets of my infected mind
Who knows what he might find?

I fear the end is in sight
Running I should be
With all my might, or?

Chasing blackness
Disappointingly cheating blackness, also

Unanswered questions,
The only thing keeping me here.
 
That's cool for this poem, but from now on, I request that you didn't double post your poetry. That way, each piece gets its proper exposure, and it doesn't start a chain reaction where I let everyone post the same poem in multiple threads, creating extra work for our servers. It may not seem like much, but it adds up.

What you could do is use this thread as sort of an "Ashley's journal" for poems that you don't think deserve their own thread, and create a new thread for poems that you want to receive extra attention. Plus, it's easier to archive.

You communicate your despair effectively. What are you running from?
 
Ashley said:
Thank you mate, I really appreciate the kind words. I'm an aspiring writer, albeit half assed, writing rarely. But I'm going to try and write more regularly and post more here if I can. Are you referring to my other post http://www.bluelight.ru/vb/threads/270885-Confessions-of-a-guilty-mind? I'll post it here for those that missed it, was a while ago now, let me know what you guys think:

Confessions of a guilty mind

Hiding in my bed, my blanket kept me warm
Outside in the real world, brewing was a storm
Four years ago, for the first time in my life
I didn't feel alone but ferociously alive

I remember it like it was yesterday, my ear glued to the phone
Talking to my soul mate, not putting on a show
Answering her questions, talking of dreams and hope
The power of an answer, I was too young to know

She asked of me, a question that came as a surprise
Is that cliff high enough, that if I jumped I'd surely die
Childish and innocent I said in my reply
Babe, sure as shit there's no way you'd land alive

How the fuck was I to know, that she would still try
Maybe if I'd answered differently, she'd still be by my side
My beautiful baby Skye, you were too far young to die
Still whenever I think of you, I can't help but cry

These are the confessions, of my guilty mind.
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you have some serious talent. i think one thing you will find is that when you are so honest and open with your writing and it comes from the heart that it is likely going to be a great peice. i look foward to reading your other poems
 
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