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[yakksoho]

This one's a while old. Very 'not me'--i never write like this!! I would adore a title if one of you could think of one. anywya i hope you enjoy it; its "one of a kind" (scuffaw) so far as my writing goes.
I dreamed last night of sex so good I could die
But as a virgin of night I don't know how I knew
And how could I know that it tasted so sweet
Never having come, and never having tasted
Another's sweat upon my tongue?
If I hold on a little longer it will come to me
Like the sweet dream lingering inside
The insides that cannot be emptied
Of the passion that they shared
As they fucked the solitude of imaginary pleasure
And I dreamed last night of seeing someone who hadn't seen me
At least not in his dreams
And he smiled, turned his head, and looked around
Like a confused puppy
He was so young and he looked so new
Shiny like a hubcap, fresh from the press
My tongue swam in my mouth through the ocean of saliva that
Plummeted over my teeth as I
Slowly drank him in
And if I had never tasted jealousy, would I still know the taste
Apart from something like desire?
And if I had never swallowed the rivers last night
Would I still understand the difference
From the flawless creme of perfect night
And the salty sap of morning
Before I was made
To clean it off my teeth?

 

[Nietzche]

As they fucked the solitude of imaginary pleasure

Although this line itself is brilliant it does not distract from the rest of the poem. Masterful word choice! This poem deserves a *bump*
[This message has been edited by Nietzche (edited 26 November 2001).]

 

[cherub]

thanks for bumping it, i missed ,,
very, sensual and erotic,,, and nice.
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The mind is a funny thing, Sometimes you need a wack on the side of the head to jare things loose, Get the mind unrepressed give it a few seconds, sometimes these things are very deep!- aphrodite(The Underworld)

 

[Haza]

excellent...the poem reminds me of lust...well maybe not as dirty as lust, but something thats inbetween love and lust but more desireable than casual sex...passion maybe?
good read
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[alykitty]

^
^I'd go with, craving....
Awesome word play...fantastic, simply

 

[yakksoho]

ya hit the mark alykitty
Thank you all for your comments they mean a lot to me!!

 

[amber ::]

beautifully written.