trying to write again

[doesntmatter]

all the practice presents is patching
places nothings needed

investments push
ubmrellas through doors

pace yourelf you're bleeding

its about time to face yourself
asthetics
tasteless
teething

velvet scent following you
vital organs
tusks and shrews
steal away, steal away
brake the day
wake the dead
things you wish you never said
a ringing in your ears
that dreaming in your head
a place i drew
and never new
once stepping out of bed

 

[RareForm]

i like this. you should write more.

 

[up all night]

^ agreed

 

[(Wordy)]

Yeah there's a nice tension in this piece between structure and craftsmanship on the one hand, and uninhibited experimentation on the other. The way you use rhymes exemplifies this.

I agree that you should definitely write more!