The Light Shining into my Grandfathers Study

[AustinRay]

wrote this along time ago, i really liked it..and i dont know anyone that likes poetry that can criticize it...that's why forums are so cooool...

The Light Shining through my Grandfathers Study

Wake! Wake!
My brother the sun has risen!
Pull in the shades
Let in the light.
Brother the sun it gleans upon the floor,
upon my bed, upon my door!

Awake! Awake!
The Sun has risen!
Sister, sister, come quick and see,
See what day has gleaned upon my shelf,
A vivid reflection from its counter, a reflection of yourself!

Glisten, glean, radiate, upon the earth O Sun.
Make dark into light, make dark into darkness run.

Wake! Wake!
The Sun has risen!
Mother, my mother come quick and see,
for you the Sun it begs, moans and pleads,
for you, for you the sun has risen, it calls for to come and see
what eternal bliss and wants--- lay inside its reverie

Stare! Stare your eyes into the sun.
To see its eternal bliss and glory
look, look and see,
See the glory that will blind you in its eternal eternity.
See the glory, it will blind you, see the eternal bliss that blinds you.
The Sun, The Sun, it calls,
come quick, come quick and see.

 

[(Wordy)]

There's no doubt the sun is worth rejoicing about! And you've expressed this, in a very traditional style that's reminiscent of the Romantic poets.

I loved these lines; they remind me of the likes of Donne, Shelley, etc:

Glisten, glean, radiate, upon the earth O Sun.
Make dark into light, make dark into darkness run.

 

[AustinRay]

Thank you wordy. I was immersing myself in Leaves of grass when I wrote this. So I tried to emulate Whitman. And that'line you quoted seems to be everyones favorite line. It's kinda catchy, I couldnt beleive my slow brain made a catchy phrase like that...lol...but thanks man.

 

[(Wordy)]

Yeah I can see the Whitman influence too. Leaves of Grass is so full of life it's almost life itself.

 

[up all night]

Oh I loved this. I hope more people read it.