Poetry the beer dance

[Jabberwocky]

I felt like writing and sat down but
the empty beer cans became alive,
sucked me straight back into the bottle,
stole my wallet and knifed me,
cackling dark maniacal laughter,
dancing around in cute psychotic pattern,
creating even a greater mess on my computer desk,
which already had one,
obviously undealt with.
Just now--
they've insulted me, see?
I might be liable to flip this flimsy desk.
I might just walk outside and eat some dirt.
I might just distill my soul and fly to the pawn shop.
I might even get drunk and call my father.
Is today recycling day?

 

[Jabberwocky]

shoutout to @tubgirl.jpg for inspiration

 

[tubgirl.jpg]

First off, thank you dude. It makes me so happy to hear that.

drank me back into the can,

Fantastic line.

stole my wallet and knifed me, laughing,

Awesome.

dancing around in cute psychotic pattern,

I like the image this creates for me.

Just now, they've insulted me, see?
I might be liable
to flip this flimsy desk.

This is really good. It's funny despite the fact that it's pretty dark.

Time to recycle.

Lovely ending.

Dude, awesome stuff as always. Now I wanna write more

 

[Jabberwocky]

I have updated the poem, V2.0 is out now---^

 

[FixXxer]

cackling dark maniacal laughter,
dancing around in cute psychotic pattern,

i never really thought laughter and pattern could rhyme until you put it like this.

creating even a greater mess on my computer desk,
which already had one,
obviously undealt with.
Just now--
they've insulted me, see?
I might be liable to flip this flimsy desk.

i love the rhymes and flow of these sections in particular.. great stuff