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Wandering in the dark,
Disorientating blackness,
Trying to find solstice,
Empty faces stare out,
Blank expressions under my fingers,
Searching in the dark,
Lost.

I look to the stars, and
The sky seems to have
Fallen upon my head, yet
The fire’s flames burn black,
Death stars heat warms my
Hands, but leaves me cold.

Tripping I fall, on to the
Hard ground, feels like steps,
Cold, hard, smooth climbing steps.

Cautiously I scramble upwards,
Until I reach for the next stair,
And I find the concrete plateau.

Children’s laughter reverberates through
My mind, so loud and vivid.
I hear clinking, rolling together, crashing?
Not far, I stand and walk nervously,
Reaching for familiarity,
Following the sound.

I hear cheers, every chinking crash,
Curiosity grows.

Finally I find them, they sit silent,
While I feel my way around their games.
A ring set in the ground; marbles?
I lift a marble, the texture is wrong,
Slightly wet, soft, moving?

Suddenly I realise, these are not marbles,
No. These are the objects I lost before
I was grown. I hold my eyes in my hands
 
Wow. This is an amazing piece of literature. Very choppy and yet it weves itself inside my mind. Very Very Nice.
 
I feel as though you're reaching for inspiration. I love the metaphorical use of eyes to creativity. Even though my derivation could be wrong, I am envious of you. You never fail to get inspiration from every emotion, to write epic works of art. Hats off to you, Drew.
 
omg....i was reminded of a piece i wrote ages ago after reading this BEEYOOOTIFUL poem my dear...except that instead of eyes, i was holding my bloody heart in my hand. Serendipity? I love this as usual....like i love ALL ur work. <3
 
I like the way you phrased a lot of this. Excellent job.

:)
 
Thanks guys..and LostProphecy you were pretty much right on..it was definitely a metaphor, and skjalff your analysis in your PM was fairly accurate as well..

Gather from it what you will, that's the sole purpose of my writing.
 
I gather nothing from this,,, you grumpy mexican ;)

Just kidding hun,
This is a more sober piece then you seem to write but very much a expressive one, as usual lately takes me forver to reply!
 
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