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doofqueen

doofqueen

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The realisation
that i let it happen
tears me up inside

I go through the motions
that i did in the past
before the day we met

Things are different
but the same
your still in my head but not here

One motion
one heart
it all rips into shreds

I smell garbage
like forgotten trash
Do you even care?

You had your time
you had me fooled
I never thought of us to be this

I had a wall
and you broke through
and now i'm the one in pieces
 
To the point and so true - felt very much the same after a similar experience last year. I think the first three lines hit home the most - its always ourselves we are the hardest on, hope things are going better for you now!
 
Things are a little better now thanks :) But your right about the part where we blame ourselves. It's what i'm most angry about really. That i for saw everything and still went with it anyway and it fucked up (thats what wearing rose coloured glasses and being trusting does to you i guess)

I'm glad the emotion came out though. I'm never quite sure when i write poetry if what I'm feeling actually comes out.

Thanks for the input :)
 
doofqueen said:
I go through the motions
that i did in the past
before the day we met

Things are different
but the same
your still in my head but not here

One motion
one heart
it all rips into shreds
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I think this captures really well that absolute sense of disorientation following a breakup. You keep doing the things you're meant to be doing, but you feel disjointed and alone, nothing is the same anymore. The ease of moving through life with someone - the "one motion" - is gone.

I think this is great, doofqueen. Like me you probably find it easier to write when you're sad. I guess something good at least comes out of suffering ;) - it gives birth to creativity.

all the best
 
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