new to poetry

[DramaQueen47]

I'm almost as new to poetry as I am to bluelight. I'd like some positive feedback, or positive criticism, if anyone is kind enough to read this.I avoided the mirror
When I woke up today.
If I’d looked I wish I could’ve seen what they say,
She’s got so much beauty deep down inside her,
Gives everything to see the incredible occur,
What happens the day that I’ve none left to give,
When I’d give up the world for a moment to relive,
To see his smile and pretend he’d never leave me,
That day is today, it is time to fly free.
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Luv Ceej
You know, it don't take much intelligence to get yourself into a nailed-up coffin. But who in the hell ever got himself out of one without removing one nail? -ladybaby7:sn

 

[FutureAeons]

I like it.

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"How the fuck do you feellllll?"
AIM ~ FutureAeons

 

[lilygirl]

that's beautiful, ceej. and you even made it rhyme

something i've tried, and failed at, hehe
it's good stuff. i'm glad you feel free again, more power to ya.
keep writing and posting and such!
just don't get as addicted to bl as i am

love ya,
~lil
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"you will get this chance but once, don't let simple shit get you down"
therapy is expensive, poppin bubble wrap is cheap. you decide.
sn~ sparkleylily