Los Amantes

[silverwheel]

Los Amantes
Dusk hits,
a rest from the voluptuous indulgences
of our first vacation.
We lie side by side,
sand bed cooling our reddened backs,
and saltwater extending to the horizon,
scenting the air like a familiar fragrance.
The sun drops, cut from a string,
and slides to orange,
coloring her skin
resting against mine.
I speak of the guesthouse,
of pesos in the sand, of the cacophony
of restaurants and boatrides,
yet I drift,
to glimpses of rest, water, another,
a thousand miles away.
She darkens.
Her words dissolve, pass around me like air,
and I forget them, distracted with
failing light.

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

yet I drift,
to glimpses of rest, water, another,
a thousand miles away.
She darkens.
Summer "love" hey? It happens to the best of us i guess...
Nice writing though, nice style... i like the way you play with the words and don't tell everything, but rather leave it up to one's own interpretations...
Very Nice. Keep writing and keep Posting!

 

[Nietzche]

Do you read much TS Eliot??? Perhaps it just my perspective-perverting obsession with Eliot, but there were a few lines in there that sounded like they could have made it into Prufrock . . .
Blegh . . .
I really like this poem! This definitly deserves a . . .
BUMP!

 

[Jordana]

I've been lurking in this forum for over a year and a half now. There have been discussions I considered joining, questions I considered answering...but nothing in the past year-plus has compelled me to end my lurk until your poetry. I've read each of your poems, and, well... There are several genuinely talented writers in this forum. I think you are, if not the zenith, certainly one of the most brightly shining stars among them.
I hope you are writing more as I post this. I hope you keep sharing your words.
I just finished reading your "Desert Route," and it floored me. But this...
...this is my favorite.