little things

[vurtomatic]

we spoke our fancies
our little lives, little dramas
mundane little details
summarised, our days

at a round table, on stools
we stepped out of
our little lives, little dramas
we met, tonight

over some beers, five bottles
over some smokes, one half packs
over ashes, to the ground

we spoke oh we spoke
into a night as young
as our hearts as old
as our souls
we spoke oh we spoke

and we laughed, at little things
at little lives, little worlds
little people, little us

we laughed, into the night
so young, our hearts
so tired, our soul
we laughed, and lived

little things, thank you

good night

 

[bisKi]

we laughed, into the night
so young, our hearts
so tired, our soul
we laughed, and lived

I like that bit best. Thank you for this one.

 

[neverwas]

from lil things big things grow...

we spoke our fancies
our little lives, little dramas
mundane little details
summarised, our days

at a round table, on stools
we stepped out of
our little lives, little dramas
we met, tonight

over some beers, five bottles
over some smokes, one half packs
over ashes, to the ground

reminded me of when you me and ant went out for our beers in the city.

love you hun

ps: from little things big things grow

 

[belisimo]

and we laughed, at little things
at little lives, little worlds
little people, little us

reminds me that life is easy and care free
reminds me that we are just a spec in this great big universe
little things are the most important, good work vurt

 

[day_for_night]

 

[yakksoho]

we spoke oh we spoke
into a night as young
as our hearts as old
as our souls
we spoke oh we spoke

I loved this part. This is a great piece of work. Not using any capital letters was a good choice and a great touch. Your 'little things' speak 'big' worlds!

 

[vurtomatic]

Re: Re: little things

thanks everyone

Not using any capital letters was a good choice and a great touch.

i should clear this up... the lack of upper case letters was not done intentionally for this piece, it's just a style of mine if u'd call it that, i hate upper case

 

[PsychoKitten]

Your work is always amazing, your words have a way of reaching inside and touching a part of all of us.

thank-you

 

[CrimsonQueen]

again, I love that rhythmatic sound (we spoke oh we spoke), the selected details of the cigs... It puts a smile on my face as it brings back memories of carefree times ... most of all I love the way each line reads so short, with no unnesscary words... a style that always features in your poems...

 

[Rollingrrl]

OMG! are you sure you don't live in madison, wi? and that you didn't come to the bar with me and all the rest of the applebee crew? nah couldn't be possible. none of them are this good at writing! great job!!!

 

[chrissy]

TOO FUCKING BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[katmeow]

Spending tonight with my oldest friends... it's always like this

Brilliant as always!!

 

[katmeow]

When I go looking for old favourites, you are often at the top of my list.

These words make me reminisce

 

[(Wordy)]

Beautiful, as always.

Thanks for the bump.