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yoUr bLiSS

yoUr bLiSS

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last december
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and what if???
and then what???
not this way
not at this time
yet who sets time?
which is which?
killing fate?
embracing destiny?
abused already
excuse or justification?
visions haunt me
the future teases me
dreams destroyed?
or
dreams created?
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Fate or Choice?
Natalie Merchant #1 repeat
Never
Never been here ever before
Why? Who are you?
Why did I trust?
Why do I trust?
You have all of me
Have you had all of me?
Denial
Hypocrisy
I love myself
Selfish
Scorned
Stuck-Uncertain
Nature vs. Science
Life vs. Death
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tonight

i pray for you in the graveyard of my heart
each and every day i give you flowers in my mind
i would have sang you to sleep had i been given the chance
CORRECTION
had i taken the chance
the chance you were never given
my one and only regret in this life
please forgive me
the world is cruel and i selfish
yet the thought of what was
what could have been
what was destroyed
and what will never be
haunts me relentlessly

in the realm of "if only"
you would be here
you would be mine
you would be ours

you would be
 
i love the lines:

"which is which?
killing fate?
embracing destiny?"

and

"have you had all of me?
denial
hypocrisy
i love myself
selfish
scorned"

in the second one,

(that really hit home).

i also really like your use of question marks: the most important capacity of a human being's self-awareness, imo, is the fact that we can question things. and it is these questions that move us forward. but it's asking the *important* questions that matters, and you're doing that. you strike me as a really intelligent person (whose poetry i haven't read enough of before now, but) will pay more attention to from now on.
 
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yoUr bLiSS said:
and what if???
and then what???
not this way
not at this time
yet who sets time?
which is which?
killing fate?
embracing destiny?
abused already
excuse or justification?
visions haunt me
the future teases me
dreams destroyed?
or
dreams created?
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ooohhh, so good..."the future teases me" really got me..
 
honey, the feelings through this are all to familiar to me.

in the realm of "if only"
you would be here
you would be mine
you would be ours

you would be
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its hard dealing with things (that happen) when they are really intense situations. especailly ones where re-precussions of the choice made. no one can make the guilt you feel go away, only you can. but you are a strong, amazing and spirited girl. in time things will get easier.

i often sit here and wonder about things that i made the wrong choice for. where would i be now if i hadnt made that choice? or i wonder what direction my life would of taken had i not gone down the path i went.

its when i sit here and dwell on it and mull it over and over in my head though that i really do myself in. i find that when i get depressed over it i look at where i am in my life now, how much i am loved by my friends and how much more love i have to give them.

if theres one thing i know...you have friends and people that love you dearlly, and no matter how shit or sad you feel they are always gonna be there to send a hug and love.

*hugs*

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thank you everyone(most of you that is) for your words. this was really hard for me to post. it's been this big secret i've been carrying around that only those closest to me know the truth of. getting it out has really helped.

onetwothreefour- i do not write for my work to be judged or critiqued. i write for release. this is one of the most personal things i have ever posted and for you to say the things you said i do take as an insult. i would appreciate it if you keep your "drunk" thoughts and comments to yourself from now on.
 
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girl just awesome work here, To share such deep insight at a glimpse of your work is a pleasure.
Healing with words helps me alot sometimes i glad to see it helped you :)
 
"please forgive me
the world is cruel and i selfish
yet the thought of what was
what could have been
what was destroyed
and what will never be
haunts me relentlessly"

I found this to be really good. This piece really got me. But it was all great. :)
 
Originally posted by yoUr bLiSS
onetwothreefour- i do not write for my work to be judged or critiqued. i write for release. this is one of the most personal things i have ever posted and for you to say the things you said i do take as an insult. i would appreciate it if you keep your "drunk" thoughts and comments to yourself from now on.


sorted. though, as you may or (most probably) may not have noticed, the vast majority of what i said was resoundingly positive. anyway, i took out anything that had any negative connotations. i do really like your poems, regardless.
 
All of them were very good... my favorite was Tonight. Thank you for sharing something so personal. You put it into perfect form to show how you really feel/felt.
 
No offence yoUr bLiSS but if you put something on a public forum you should expect some negative comments. The biggest problem with Words is that it can be such a wank-wank 'ohhh you're so great' kind of forum. Accept the good with the bad and take it as constructive criticism.

The broken nature of your words is how my thoughts run most of the time. I would love to have fluid, meaningful thoughts but then again, if I did, maybe they wouldn't cut to the heart of the matter.

It's easy to be poetic but it's so damn hard to be truthful.
 
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