Internal Bedlam/ the deconstruction of Christmas (censored for explicit content)

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

Internal Bedlam/ the deconstruction of Christmas (censored for explicit content)

due to everyone (including myself) in need of an attitude adjustment.. i'll have to send you this poem via e-mail if you really want it..i sincerely apologize to the great writers and audience of this forum who didn't get the chance. here's the other 2 poems listed in the title:
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Internal Bedlam
introverted bedlam throwing bricks and lighting fuses
content in this riot of self destructive muses
falling everyday from a truth too hard to handle
ran too many jaded laps for choregraphed gasps
so there is no self pity ,fear or hate
when i decide that suicide is the optimistic side
i've just lost eye sight but i'm doing just fine
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Deconstruction of Christmas
i sit by a fire place and threw all i purched in the flames..
with time drawing near i'm constructing little crafts..
to replace those gifts, but not in the name of the lord...
i don't wish to have a half naked man mutilated on a cross
to be in my sight on the beauty of a christmas morning
but this morning is meaningless..that's what the world tells me
for the more they preach, they more that is advertised
the less i want to buy
it is a holocaust to everything i hold dear
i guess i love it for what it is not..
exploitation, enslavement, and prostitution
an invasion, a piracy, of all that is humane
that leaves me coated in an afterbirth that burns like gastric juices
-an infestation of a terminal disease
personified into a fat red man "ho ho"ing with a cola in his hand
a holy day borrowed from fireworshippers and generic sluts
incorporated into a conversion for christian hyposcrisy acned with capitalistic burns
all we need on this day is family
loved ones, maybe pets, and our friends
not the shallow and distored big boys
with leashes little leashes to lend
[ 17 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
[ 17 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]

 

[goodnitestar]

I write when Im sober
I write when Im drunk
and neither for any particular reason other than my love for it, and when I wrote the things on drunk and writtingIII I was not trying to waste any ones time, no one HAS to read anything posted here, it is a free to write how you feel, and maybee what you are doing, dont discriminate on anyone elses stuff
I do not need a "Chemical" as you state:
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"that if you must need a chemical and need to imitate to be artistic
your artistry is not real"
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I have been posting on words for quite some time, completely sober , and perfectly content with that.
I at times may have some influence, but not usually when I write or do some form of art.
And I am rather offended that you would refer to me as a "PATHETIC LITTLE DRUG ADDICT" when I am not at all, and you do not know me at all. Many of these people do deserve to live, and have a right to be poetic, and even maybee go through a hard time with drugs, I have never been addicted to anything, not even cigarrettes.
I have no problem with you so prefusely providing your opinion, but maybee you should have some pretext facts behind it, other than assumptions from a tittle to a poem.
[ 16 December 2002: Message edited by: goodnitestar ]

 

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

*takes a bow... "boo's are beautiful when harmonized"

 

[harraser]

Your post was closed, not because Angelight didnt like what you had to say, but because this is a forum for POETRY AND OTHER FORMS OF WRITTEN ART! You did not post a poem, or anything of any form of art, you were simply having a bitch. If you wish to complain then go right ahead, you have Social to do it in. They love all sorts of bullshit rants there. This forum is for art, in any of its written forms, not for childish bitching.
I will be the first to admit that you have some skill in writing, infact id even go as far as to say yo have a lot of skill, but do you really think anyone is going to cry if you leave and never come back? Because thats what im inviting you to do if you dont like the way things are run here. There will always be more writing to read, and there will always be more people to bitch in your place. Trust me you wont be missed for long.
So basically, what im saying is, get off your fucking high horse. Just because you can write does not mean that any work by other people that does not meet your oh so noble and high minded standards should not be posted. If people choose to write while drunk, or on acid, or heroin, or nutmeg, or sleep deprevation, or any other form of altered state of being (no matter how much you or anyone else may look down on such a state) then that is their perogative. Who are you to say that their writing is any less valid for thier not being sober when it was written? Is it then also "wrong" to write after 6 hours of solid meditation? Because anyone who has done that will tell you that they have significantly altered perceptions of thier world after such an experience, so is it "wrong" because they are not "sober", meaning in the same frame of mind as YOU when YOU wrote your pieces? Or is it ok to write after hours of deep meditative trance because meditation is acceptable, and even honourable in the eyes of so much of the world? I could list many a great writer, painter, philosopher, scientist etc, both current and through history, who was a "pathetic little drug addict" but i wont waste the time. Quite simply, it should not matter how the artist came about the frame of mind that produced their art. It is the art that matters, in and of itself.
In future, if you do not like the decision of a moderator you can either post in the Announcements and Feedback forum or, preferably, you can email them personally with your complaint. Pointless posts about your personal opinions towards other peoples writing or towards moderators decisions will be closed! If you dont like it theres a quick and simple solution, LEAVE. Its no great loss to us.
So ill finish with this quote from our forum guidelines, and ask you to please read them before the next time you post or reply.

2) POSITIVE CRITICISM ONLY
We, the moderators, would like to keep the atmosphere in this forum as POSITIVE as possible. We don’t want to discourage anyone from posting, and we understand that some matters are very personal and may be difficult for the person to post. Therefore, please only reply when you can do so in a POSITIVE nature. If you don’t like a poem, then move on. Negative comments will be modified or deleted as the moderators feel necessary. There will be NO DEBATING in this forum.If you want to debate or discuss an issue, we refer you to The Lounge, where discussions are welcomed. And if you have a comment you want to share with the author that you don’t feel meets these guidelines, then by all means, take it to email. NO DRAMA IN THIS FORUM.
-ant
PS. Feel free to email me at [email protected] if you wish to discuss this more, but further posts of this nature will not be tolerated and will be deleted. thank you.
[ 16 December 2002: Message edited by: harraser ]

 

[shannabanana]

because i think someone is wasting my time by posting generic poems that are gay?
You choose how to spend your time. You choose whether or not to read somebody's work. If you feel your time has been wasted, you can only blame the person who made you read those poems: yourself.

 

[SelectionIll]

interesting.
you really pick and choose what opinions can be expressed, huh.
didn't like it when you were the target.
watch out, you look a little bitter.
by the way, where's ammut to yell at you about being mean?
hi ammut
p.s. i hope this isn't taken as critisism, but i think you are a piece of shit for calling that girl up there a pathetic little drug addict. i never really thought you were very good at writing, and now, i think you're an asshole too.
by the way, that p.s. up there is a new poem i wrote. it has nothing to do with moralitychickenpox or whatever his name is, so don't bother me with a recitation of the rules. i know em.
and thanks to harraser for reigning in the leash on this petty fuck. (oops, that was a poem too)
seemore, and yes i do.
[ 16 December 2002: Message edited by: SelectionIll ]

 

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

look, i saw like 10 poems in 5 hours about people drinking. It annoyed me. I bitched.
I wouldn't have made it a big deal if people my thread hadn't been closed. I don't care if someone write drunk. I have before. And i wasn't making direct insults on anyone but in general and just popping off at the lip.
My beef (lunchmeat is probably a better word) was alot of people were writing about the same shit over and over and it began to look like people were copying each other. Like "oh she wrote about being drunk and that was a good poem..i'll do it to... and then he'll do it, and she'll do it.. and finally all we'll write about is being drunk." I posted this in 3 other forums where i post my poetry b/c i saw the same thing which is probably why i saw so many Acoholic Anon needed type poetry within one day.
My beef with drugs.. i don't do them, and i am against them. I think bluelight has a wonderful "Words" forum so hence why i post here.
So Section-- I wan't busting on anyONE's art, but alot of peoples. And if you "never" thought i was good at writing..why did you spend so much time reading the majority of what i posted here?
I was not attacking that girl by saying "pitiful little drug addict" but Bluelight and other artists who feel the need to have a substance as their sole inspiration ( whether they were great writers, published and praised or not).
To goodnightstar--i think that's the name.... I sincerely apologize. and to the Mods... i've seen plenty of negative criticism on here, some on my work, and other's work. Why is it i get my shit jumped and no one else? I read through here thoroughly..so i do know this for a fact.
I'm now deleting the poem off... b/c i have 2 other works on here that i wish to have more attention paid to. And if everyone's gonna be an ass b/c i had a complaint that's fine.
Who am i to have an opinion? If i can't have one ..what the fuck gives you the right to judge mine? um That would be your opinion? right? hmm..double standards.. nice..
I apologize we didn't see eye to eye.
[ 17 December 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]