her skirt (revised)

[jameslovesyou]

her skirt
ass
legs
and the blanket
...man...
it was a gulleywasher
a flow like none before
and now she lays there
on that drenched blanket
on the cold warehouse floor
with a quivering
in her center
and i want to enter her
again
and again
and again
engaging that flow
causing that glow
she turns all
fireworks
and sky
like a constant
~~~finale~~~

 

[Amanita Mary]

love it i love it i love it
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[(Wordy)]

The territory's a fine line to tread... I've read some bad, bad poems about orgasms, but this is a good one. :D

wharehouse

Is that intended as a fusion of warehouse / whorehouse, or just a typo?

 

[New]

I love your poem. It just says, "This shit was AWESOME!!!", but more refined. And that shit in itself is awesome.

 

[jameslovesyou]

typo...it was a warehouse.
thanks for all the positivity!

love.

 

[emesaeler]

she turns all
fireworks
and sky

I liked this line alot, and the setting. good job!