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Taliana

Taliana

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Im lost.
I left my heart in the gutter
while i was looking for you
Oh how it got cold...

so incredibly cold

Losing everything of importance
in search for acceptance
its time, to bring all my wrongs to the surface

i only want to feel again

My cold heart is so lonely
its my flaws that are keeping me company
It must be time to twist my fate
my ever optimistic but so recently pessimistic, fate

Where would you start, where would you begin,
the coldness has so undeniably settled in,
An obvious disconnection from that fantasy land
to enter into a world that on the surface, doesnt seem so grand

because i only want to feel again

This world is whats real
Im Starting to see Colours
its been years... oh the tears...

Its Been Years.

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And onto a new beginning.


Id like to make that into a song, obvioiusly will need to format it ab bit better and make a part of it the chorus... but thats the poem version. I dont normally use too much rhyme but it worked i think in this.

Meh :)

edit: ive edited this, a few words/lines that i thought needed work, but yeah. Done.
 
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I would hardly call myself a poetry connoisseur, in fact ive never posted in this forum before, but this really tugs at my heart strings. :)
 
it would make a wonderful song honey. i can really picture it... youll have to play it for me some time :) *hugs*

-ant
 
Thanks guys... Now this i ask you, have i ever written a non emotive piece? ;) hhe...

I edited it a bit, some things were repeated too much and were pissing me off, so yeah. Its edited.
 
^^^ yeah, i liked that part best too.

and funny you should have written this as a song -- b/c the first comment i had before i read that part was "you should turn this into a song."
 
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