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doofqueen

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You've hurt me so much
that you don't even know
I don't want to wait
but i have been
and i will
I can't help that i fell hard
It wasnt all me
No time and effort for me?
aren't i worth more then things?
What happened to the first words?
giggles?
laughs?
stories?
smiles?
and butterflies we spoke of and felt?
It was simple and timeless
that first kiss
that first click
and all that followed?
my walls came down
i'm sorry
But i was under orders
my heart told me to
my head said give way
make room
he cares
he needs
he feels
you said so
but now?
you just threw it away
angels cry too
even wicked ones

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what do you think? feelings ? emotions? flow? etc...

edit - spelling mistake fixed
 
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that first kiss
that first click
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first read i thought that said dick! and for that reason i loved it...
but then i realised it was click and the whole biz fell into the same old same old love's ended poem.

now this is not directly at you but we should probably rename this the lost love words forum coz it seems everyone loves to get melancholy and write.

i thought your piece flowed well and i understood everything you said, which is excellent bcoz so often i have no idea what people are trying to say.
i'd be happy to read more of your work.
 
:( *hugs*

New sites, new horizons, new men in sight.

Take the flight, for it is your right, be free of players.

Very well written sweetie! :)
 
thanks for the responses, the last few poems i have posted up i've actually thought were not as good as my other ones so thats heaps cool

Its an old one actually (still about the last x) *sigh*

dr...you could do a serach in here for my stuff but i dont know how easily you will find the other poems :p

I'll try and gather them together and put them all in this thread if your keen to read them?
 
I love then ending of this, angels cry too, even wicked ones, it just give it finality, and altough that perhaps is not the best word to decribe it, it was the first that jumped into my lil head...
 
thanks :) WickedAngel is actually my handle everywhere else but here so it represented me by saying that. i guess i do have closure with it too, i just miss what we had :)
 
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tis good to know where you're coming from. I like it :)
It's like I can feel the range of emotions filtering through your mind
 
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