emotionisdead67
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First short story.
Very short story, my first attempt actually, its nothing very great and took very little time and thought. I just wrote it as it came. Still it has a good point so read and comment.
Static acuminates the last connection to reality one mans cell phone the rest lost. A crowd of people lost on a island with little to no hope of rescue, and survival. Panic overtakes them as they realize there is no service available and listen to the sounds of a faded dial tone. It was a horrible shipwreck The last remanding crew of 100 people. Lucky they were to survive and make it to an obscure island about a days away from the scene.
All frantic and frolicking around. Wondering how they will die. Thoughts of never being able to communicate with loved ones overtake them with a slight depression. The night sky paints the scene black and symbolizes the situation there faced with. A lone business man currupts and plaques the group with negativity and complains about losing out on a big business deal they could've "made" him. A loving father of 3 children sits beside himself and reflects on his and there lives and ponders the future of his children and hopes the best. The rest debating on what exactly to do for survival.
They build a fire for warmth and plan the next day to hunt and survey the island for any vegetation and food. They spend the next couple of days feeling tired, worn, upset, and beat down. Anger and aggression breaks out fustrating the situation has become. They've found food although theres not much to last them very long. With no communication, entertainment or nothing that they were accustomed with back in a natrual reality setting they have no clue what to do and become bored and restless.
They over the time learn to use there imaginations for fun and creativity. One of the survivors from the wreak has committed suicide he just threw himself into the ocean and drowned. The once hungry and starved business man who lost himself to the visions of money and the hand that feeds has learned and found himself again. He's awoken to a bigger picture and has been captivated fully to the enlightenment which he's neglected since a young man in his early 20's.
The father and business man sit aside while the others collect wood for the fire. The business man points to the brightest star he see's and points and say's "that star is a sign, the brightest i've seen. I will no close my eyes in vision the sky's landscape as it is now reach for that star and place it in my heart and we will be saved and if not know that everything happens for a reason and if I have the chance to change everything I've done I will. God bless us all." So he does this.
A couple days pass no food left. All hungry and starved for a new chance at life with no beliefs and a regained imagination and love for life found only in those of young children. All hindered by success, and money. They lay in a circle discussing how they changed and how this situation has bettered each and everyone of them and how and if they ever get back to civilization how they will change.
The next morning they all awake to a fleet of ships and planes overhead. They had been saved. With big smiles and hugs going around the men are happy once again knowing that they will leave. The scar's been imprinted but this time it's for the best. The men leave as men but changed dramatically. They love life again and wont let it beat them down.
Later that night when back home the business man looks up and finds that very surreal bright shining star. Looks up and smiles and says this was for the best.
Very short story, my first attempt actually, its nothing very great and took very little time and thought. I just wrote it as it came. Still it has a good point so read and comment.
Static acuminates the last connection to reality one mans cell phone the rest lost. A crowd of people lost on a island with little to no hope of rescue, and survival. Panic overtakes them as they realize there is no service available and listen to the sounds of a faded dial tone. It was a horrible shipwreck The last remanding crew of 100 people. Lucky they were to survive and make it to an obscure island about a days away from the scene.
All frantic and frolicking around. Wondering how they will die. Thoughts of never being able to communicate with loved ones overtake them with a slight depression. The night sky paints the scene black and symbolizes the situation there faced with. A lone business man currupts and plaques the group with negativity and complains about losing out on a big business deal they could've "made" him. A loving father of 3 children sits beside himself and reflects on his and there lives and ponders the future of his children and hopes the best. The rest debating on what exactly to do for survival.
They build a fire for warmth and plan the next day to hunt and survey the island for any vegetation and food. They spend the next couple of days feeling tired, worn, upset, and beat down. Anger and aggression breaks out fustrating the situation has become. They've found food although theres not much to last them very long. With no communication, entertainment or nothing that they were accustomed with back in a natrual reality setting they have no clue what to do and become bored and restless.
They over the time learn to use there imaginations for fun and creativity. One of the survivors from the wreak has committed suicide he just threw himself into the ocean and drowned. The once hungry and starved business man who lost himself to the visions of money and the hand that feeds has learned and found himself again. He's awoken to a bigger picture and has been captivated fully to the enlightenment which he's neglected since a young man in his early 20's.
The father and business man sit aside while the others collect wood for the fire. The business man points to the brightest star he see's and points and say's "that star is a sign, the brightest i've seen. I will no close my eyes in vision the sky's landscape as it is now reach for that star and place it in my heart and we will be saved and if not know that everything happens for a reason and if I have the chance to change everything I've done I will. God bless us all." So he does this.
A couple days pass no food left. All hungry and starved for a new chance at life with no beliefs and a regained imagination and love for life found only in those of young children. All hindered by success, and money. They lay in a circle discussing how they changed and how this situation has bettered each and everyone of them and how and if they ever get back to civilization how they will change.
The next morning they all awake to a fleet of ships and planes overhead. They had been saved. With big smiles and hugs going around the men are happy once again knowing that they will leave. The scar's been imprinted but this time it's for the best. The men leave as men but changed dramatically. They love life again and wont let it beat them down.
Later that night when back home the business man looks up and finds that very surreal bright shining star. Looks up and smiles and says this was for the best.
