Disjointed.

[Raz]

So much black rot surprises me
The green is usually so much more apparent.

But here I am hating so much
And I have to wonder how I'm not the first one,
Because this sure feels unprecedented.

Words are meant to be my ally,
They always have been.

Instead they're my weapons
And I use them against you like I was skinning you slowly,
Killing you softly with my song.

There's romance when I say it like that,
More to it all than just being fucked up.

More to it than wanting the violence that comes with being spurned,
More than wanting to fit in your world for a change,
Because at some point I realise that's all a fantasy.

At some point I remember,
I'm no more than what I am.

At some point I remember
How my words can cut deeper than a knife,
How they can cut anybody but myself.

The knife is there for anything else.
The knife and the bottle.
The knife and the bottle.


...The knife and the bottle...

 

[RareForm]

I loved this alot, sort of an in-your-face type of writing, very raw and original, great job!

 

[up all night]

Yeah this was great work Raz. You and harraser often remind me of the other in your writings.

 

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

Originally posted by Raz
...like I was skinning you slowly...

^Wow. -=Breathes=-
I love the simple, honest soul baring imagery in this, Raz. Beautiful.

 

[neverwas]

But here I am hating so much
And I have to wonder how I'm not the first one,
Because this sure feels unprecedented.

Raz this is probly the best raw and honest peace i think ive read of urs

 

[Cosmic Mist]

it's so rare that such honesty can be portrayed in such a simple and elegant piece of writing. I really like it. And i can relate completely.

I like this best:

At some point I remember,
I'm no more than what I am.

 

[haste]

Great stuff Raz!

 

[cherub]

the simpilicity of this writting makes it so raw and enjoyable to read