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sunEdltye

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Took you out
It was our first date
It was my first date ever.
I gave up addiction,
I gave up jealousy.
You said a goodnight
Kiss.
I was scared afterwards,
I was a beautiful mind.
I asked for a kiss,
You pushed me away.
I ran. I wanted to kill someone.
I bought cigerettes.
They say they can kill me,
But I say I'm already dead.
You pushed me away,
And the demons came back in.
I cried at a church,
Then wrote this poem.
I am an asshole.
There is no more nice guy underneath.
I now smoke.
Evan
 
Evan, you are who you are, and that is a passionate and caring person. Many may never get the chance to see what you have hidden behind the person most see but I have gotten to see a young man who I know cares more about the world than most of us will ever know.
 
I really liked this.....I feel I should say something more but no words are coming to me....just nice work sunE :)
 
powerful stuff.
i've missed your writing. you have this blunt way of displaying emotion, and it gets to me every time. your underlying message in this is sad.. but i also think i know you well enough to know that you wont let it get you down for too long. you're an awesome guy and an excellent writer. hope to see you posting more my sweet.
 
I guess i sort of owe you guys an explanation to this poem. I havent written a poem in here in month, or anywhere for that matter, then all of a sudden a great pain in my heart forced me to my pen and paper.
I took my ex-gf out last night because she said we need to date before we can go out. I took her to see "A Beautiful Mind" and did everything correct. I paid and openned the door for her and I even showed her to her door at the end. I asked her a week before what the difference was between a date and hanging out and she said a kiss at the end of the night, so I asked her a week ago if I would get a kiss after our date. She said if I was good.
Well when the time came I asked If I could get a kiss. It was my first date I ever been on and I didnt know there were these idiotic underline rules that I had to follow. She said I couldnt get a kiss because I asked for it, so I grabbed her and said "Then I wont ask" and tried to kiss her. She pushed me away and at that moment everything stopped. I dont think I've ever been hurt like that. So I rushed to the nearest Chevron and bought myself a pack of cigerettes then proceeded to hit my pipe as hard as I could.
It took something of this magnitude to make me write again, yet the life of the artist will always be pain and suffering.
Evan
 
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^fully I was thinking taht too.
Its a sad situation sunE but E-girls right, at least youre writing again, it helps.
 
Baby, I don't know the situation, but if you ever want to get it all out in an email... ;)
First of all, I don't know anything about any silly "kiss at the end of the date" rules, so don't let this ruin any of your future dates with any neuroses. Sounds quite confusing to me too, so you aren't the only one. :)
As I counted up my demons,
Saw there was one for every day.
With the good ones on my shoulder,
I drove the other ones away.
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