as i am

[sheit]

the stars have fallen
from your crown
yet i cannot imagine
their fading
(some things should last forever!)

your unwanted absence
has left me
with nothing
but your resounding words
to keep me company
(but i don't desire words--
take them back!)

you'd often say
time knew nothing
but now
i'm without
and time
is all i have

god! how i miss your smile
i cannot fathom
having to face this
unbearable cold bed
and the deafening silence
of this empty room alone
and so,
i find myself avoiding sleep

my life has been full
of endless nights
and calls that seem
to never make it thru...
stars whose shining dulled
waves that always leave behind
parched sands that thirst
bitter mouths of tired people
who house broken hearts
and hungry eyes which plead
and empty-handed lovers
who absent-mindedly count stars
as we bow our heads in prayer
begging for sanctuary to find us
and our beloved

and we cling wildly to hopes
that forever
is a word
known not only by the heart
all the while
letting love
and loved ones
slip
slowly
past
us

so now,
instead
just kiss me
and let me find my hair
messied by your fingertips
and let me steady my akward stance
in the comfort and warmth
of the arms of one
who'd never think
to ask me to be
everything he needs of me
but simply
lets me
exist
as i am

 

[plazma]

A moving and well written poem. The imagery you use is powerful and emotive.

my life has been full
of endless nights
and calls that seem
to never make it thru...
stars whose shining dulled
waves that always leave behind
parched sands that thirst
bitter mouths of tired people
who house broken hearts
and hungry eyes which plead
and empty-handed lovers
who absent-mindedly count stars
as we bow our heads in prayer
begging for sanctuary to find us
and our beloved

This stanza was the one I liked best, and certainly it exemplifies your descriptive style.

-plaz out-

 

[katmeow]

I found this piece very moving and a few sections really struck a chord with me.

god! how i miss your smile
i cannot fathom
having to face this
unbearable cold bed
and the deafening silence
of this empty room alone
and so,
i find myself avoiding sleep

It's amazing how much comfort sleeping next to that one person can provide

and we cling wildly to hopes
that forever
is a word
known not only by the heart
all the while
letting love
and loved ones
slip
slowly
past
us

This is along the lines of an idea from a piece I've been trying to put together at the mo. The concept of forever seems to be embraced by the heart whilst the mind thinks (knows?) otherwise.

Very nice choice of language.

This is a beautiful piece... thank you for posting

 

[sheit]

aw...thank you guys so much for the kind words!

think i'll post another...

 

[Negative]

so now,
instead
just kiss me
and let me find my hair
messied by your fingertips
and let me steady my akward stance
in the comfort and warmth
of the arms of one
who'd never think
to ask me to be
everything he needs of me
but simply
lets me
exist
as i am

Put some imagery into my head about a particular reunion with someone that I wanted to happen but didn't . . . says so much with so few words . . . very nice.

 

[katmeow]

god! how i miss your smile
i cannot fathom
having to face this
unbearable cold bed
and the deafening silence
of this empty room alone
and so,
i find myself avoiding sleep

Too often