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[Raz]

there is a boy
who grew up
without boys
misshapen thing
in a world of women
girls
the fairer sex
the only sex
and he never learned to be
a man
until he thought he did
mastered stupid things
vapid obscenities
an appreciation of the obtuse
the gentle art of the obnoxious front
feelings are lame
fucking is awesome
brash greetings
the secret language of drunk
and he was happy
for a while he was happy
but he was only a visitor
his masculinity a mask
a veneer
he used words like veneer
an immediate disqualifier
his drag act ran its course
his newfound pack smelled outsider
and left
left him to the world of gay best friend
her sympathetic confidante
not one of us
never one of us
and now what he has is memories
of being a better chameleon
grief
for something that never really was
pinocchio dreams
trapped under wood
and a life
never really lived.

 

[Wonka]

Nicely done. some blues for ya

 

[Shadowsblaze]

I liked that.

 

[Captain.Heroin]

I felt a lot of the writer's personal experience was infused into this writing, was it Raz?

It's rather good, though it's rather brief (but as a writer I'm overly verbose, so that's probably why I'm saying this)

 

[Raz]

I felt a lot of the writer's personal experience was infused into this writing, was it Raz?

It's rather good, though it's rather brief (but as a writer I'm overly verbose, so that's probably why I'm saying this)

Yep, I have been writing lots of fluff lately and wanted to try for something with a bit more substance so I mined the ol' psyche...glad it was well received

 

[Captain.Heroin]

Yep, I have been writing lots of fluff lately and wanted to try for something with a bit more substance so I mined the ol' psyche...glad it was well received

It did indeed have a great deal of substance and the voice was so honest and raw. Thanks for sharing

 

[dirzted]

soooo gooodddd
gawd i love bluelight

 

[tocooperate]

"until he thought he did
mastered stupid things
vapid obscenities
an appreciation of the obtuse
the gentle art of the obnoxious front"

being a "Man".. brilliantly defined !

"and now what he has is memories
of being a better chameleon"

i love the sound of being a better chameleon !!

only thought: how does "what he has are memories" sound instead?