My Lyrics - Comments?

[Healer]

My Lyrics - Thoughts and feedback?

Hey all,
I hope this is allowed, I can't seem to think of any reason it wouldn't be (but sorry in advance if it isn't for some reason), anyways please read on.

I have started writing lyrics to be developed into songs when I get a band together my major influences include Bring me the horizon (Sempiternal, That's the spirit) and Linkin Park. I'm looking at mostly producing metalcore songs.
Below is some lyrics I've been working on, If anyone wants to leave feedback that'd be appreciated (if you don't have any real feedback maybe just let me know if you like it or not and why).

Look forward to discussing with you all

Album: Life, Death and... What Next?
Table of Contents ​

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All songs listed in the Table of Contents are planned for our first album: "Life, Death and... What Next?" (LD&W) except for "Judas" which is planned for the second album "Relations with Demons and Angels". This is not a complete list of LD&W, as there are 10 songs scheduled for this album but these are the ones I have either completed or which are over 95% complete.

1. What Does It Mean?

2. Home

3. Dreams

4. Bandaids

5. Warriors

6. Neverland

7. Guilt

8. Judas

"What does it mean?"

"V1:
Heaven and hell
What do they mean?
Satan and God
Are they really such strong enemies?
Life and death
What does it all mean?
What is good and what is bad?
Is everything so strongly opposed?
Do we have to have struggle
Do we have to have conflict
For it all to make sense?

Chorus:
Help me survive this world alone
Help me hold myself together
Put me out of this misery
Put me out of this grief
Let me sleep
End this hallucination
That we call life
And take my breath
From me!!!

V2:
Say what you want about me
Say what you believe
Because is any of it really real at all?
is this living?
Or is it all in my mind?
And who's to state exclusivities?
The angels, the demons
That live in your mind
Are they an extension of yourself?
Or an extension of those you hate?

Chorus

V3:
I will not bow
to your mindless creations
to your dictation of my life
I will not bow to your lies
I'm not proud
I'm not cold blooded
I'm not righteous
I'm not hate
I am love
I am rebellious
I am who I am!

Chorus

V4:
What does it mean?
Life and death
Love and hate
Pride and humility
What does it all mean?
Let me live my life
And I'll let you live your's
Live and let live
What does it all mean?

Chorus"

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Home

"V1:
You're not alone
Not anymore
Hidden in the darkness
But light will give you hope

When you're all alone
There is hope in our words
With us there is a home
You are not alone!

Chorus:
The darkness may prevail
But the light will never fall
Your life may shatter
But this home will never fail
This home will never fail!
This is home! It will never fail!

V2:
The home you've never known
Is found within, it's found in us
It's found in those you love
It's found in the life you live
Accept yourself, accept your friends.
And don't let any snakes or voltures in!
This is the home you never knew!
Make of it what you will
Some dream of a garden
Some of a golden city
Some of a family
It is what it is

Chorus

V3:
You never knew this home
Your mind rolls on
You wonder if you ever will
Life isn't what falls into our hands
It's what we make of it
You may have been dealt crappy cards
But it's our obligation -
To play the hell out of what we've been given
You may never know you're home
Though it isn't down to fate
It's down - to - you!

Chorus

V4:
Forget the doubt
Forget the hatred
Embrace the love and the truth
This is how home is formed
Love each other
Because we'll fight for you all
Believe me when I tell you
We dont fight for you to fall

Bridge:
I'm drowning now, stuck in the darkness
Won't somebody drag me out
Won't someone save us all?
I'm laying here in wait!
No - don't fail me now!
(OH!)

Chorus"
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Dreams

"V1:
These dreams I dream
Are these dreams
Really just dreams?
Or are they the moments we awaken
From our dreams?

In my sleep I feel more alive
Than in my own life
I feel more free
Than I do in this world
Listen to me
Hear my soul cry

Chorus:
You can take my dreams
You can take this life
You can take my hopes
You can take my heart
From my cold hands!
Over my dead body!
There is no land for us!

V2:
In these dreams
It's heavenly and warm
As the warmth makes my skin glow
I feel the hand of God tucking me in
Stroking my head as I lay there, gone
I feel no pain
Feel no sorrow
I feel everything melt away
I peer behind the veil and I see the world
For what it is.

Chorus

V3:
Now I awaken
But is this awake?
Back to the real world, is this a mistake?
Back to the monotony -
the pain and hatred.
I'm separated from that glorious glow.
Darkness decends again
Alone and empty within

Chorus

V4:
All these days
I will forever more long
To live forever in my dreams
To never have to awaken again
They say the darkness runs from light -
Surely that's the only lie.

Bridge:
Take me back, to the start again
Let me experience the embrace -
The hope, the happiness, the warmth
What I fail to find in this world
I find there
In my dreams!
There is no land for us!

Chorus"​

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Bandaids

"V1:
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Maybe it's a bandaid
Sometimes its all we got
Don't say it won't work
Sometimes all we can do
Is all we can do
Sometimes we only have bandaids
(Not stitches and bandages)
Sometimes we only have knives
(Not guns and missiles)
But heaven knows an inch
Is better than nothing

Chorus:
It may only be a bandaid
Sometimes we just gotta make do
Sometimes some bread
Is better than no food
Laws may not change hearts
Sometimes hope is all we can give
But if hope is the only treatment
You can't say we have nothing!
Today is a good day to die!

V2:
Our vices may tide us over
They say to avoid the drugs
Sometimes if you're just holding on
Living another day is worth it
Sometimes if you're just holding on
Vices can hold us out for a bit longer
Hope, give us hope!
It's one more day, a chance to live -
Rather than die.
We are warriors, we fight for our lives!
(Walk with me through hell!)

Chorus

V3:
This may cost us more later
But if it's the choice between
Death and living a bit longer
The cost of living another day
is the cheaper; We suffer in silence
While the institute ignores the pain
They don't know what more to do
So why chastise for self treatment
Put yourself in our place
Then tell us what you'd do!

Chorus

V4:
Bandaids may be a temporary answer
But sometimes that's all we need
Bandaids may not be the answer
But sometimes we just need -
The strength to push on
Take the good with the bad
Take the rare wins with the losses
Bandaids will tide us through
Because we're just broken people -
Taped together with bandaids
Taped together with bandaids

Bridge:
Through hell and high water we charge!
Through hell and high water we march!
Through hell and high water we crawl!
Through hell and high water we press on!

Chorus"

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Warriors

"V1:
Waking up each day
Shaking and sweating
Mental pain
Fight off the memories
Shake off the scars
We want to live normally
But look at what we are
We have voices in our heads
Self-critical bastards
We fear nothing more
Than the fact they'll walk with us
Until the end

Chorus:
Nothing's over till we say it's over!
We are the warriors
Fighting our own minds
We are the warriors
Fighting demons in disguise
Bodys covered in wounds
and minds covered in scars
But nothing's over till we say it's over!


V2:
We want nothing more//
Than to be able to hang up -
The swords and guns
To be able to live again as people//
To not have to fight another day//
This would be a miracle//
To be able to relax, to not have to struggle//
This is what we wish our dreams were made of//
But they aren't -
Instead we relive our days in hell

Chorus

V3:
They say we'll get better
They say the pain will end
But we've seen so many of our brethren
Stand and fall
So few make it out alive
So how do we believe?
How do we continue to fight?
When everything we've seen -
Haunts us in the night?

Chorus

V4:
One day is our hope
One day is our future
Let me spread my wings
Let us end this torture
Sword in hand
The future hope
In our hands

Bridge:
Nothing's over till we say it's over!
(But do we believe this)
Nothing's over till we say it's over!
(But is it true?)
Nothing's over till we say it's over!
(But do we have the strength to fight?)

Chorus"
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Neverland

"V1:​

This is how I show myself
Through my songs
I give my love
Give my heart
I go hard
Give my all
I sprawl my soul on paper

People are precious
People are all there are
If we can't love ourselves
Who will love us for us?

Chorus:
Cut them down!
The haters, the thieves of dreams!
Cut them all fucking down!
The liars, the thieves, the destroyers!
Cut them down, Save our lands!
The lands where we can become free
The lands we love so dearly

V2:
I always said If I can drown
Myself in your darkness
To give you light
This suffering I suffer
Might all be worth it
If I can save lives!
Lend me your ears!
Lend me your hearts!
Give me your tears!
Tell me your lives!
Let me heal! (Now!)

Chorus

V3:
This is the land, the land we love
This is the land of dreams
Where everything comes clean
The land where everything we hope
Becomes reality
It is the place where we become free
Where we can shed our shells
And realise our dreams

Chorus

V4:
This is our land
The land we inhabit
The land of peace and love
The land of dreams and music
The land of life and stories
The land of health and knowledge
The land we never want to leave

Bridge:
So lend me your hearts
Lend me your lives
Create this land
defend it with your lives
Anyone who threatens
This Neverland
We will cut him... down!

Chorus"

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Guilt

"V1:​

Am I cursed to live out my days -
Wondering if it's all my fault?
Asking if all the pain and the hurt
Asking if all the mass fallouts
Asking if all the lost friends
Is all my fault?
It's like living in wonderland
A land where nothing makes sense
A land where I don't understand anything
Am I cursed to a life of guilt?

Bridge:
I try to change, but I just relive the pain
I end up retracing every move I made
I remember the darkness of my past
And I end up bringing back these memories
Re-living my worst memories
That I wish I didn't have!

Chorus:
Guilt - like a thick black veil
I need to peirce it!
I need to burn it!
Shred it to pieces!
Can't spend my days thinking
Can't spend my days -
In yesterday!
I need to destroy the veil
Break down the darkness
Light it up like the night!

V2:
You treat me like crap
Then turn around and want -
my respect
You can't burn bridges
Turn around and want to cross
You can't burn the bible
Then pray for your salvation
You can't play with fire
Then wonder why you got burned

Chorus

V3:
Destroy yourself!
You won't ever have my love
When you mentally abused me
Abandoned me and left me
Accused me and tried to destroy me
I won't feel guilt anymore!
I refuse to care anymore!
This isn't my home
I decide my home!
I refuse to feel guilt anymore!

Chorus

V4:
I won't let you make me feel this!
Not after you tried to burn me!
Don't turn around and wonder
Why you're getting kicked
When you're down -
Why you're getting a taste
Of you're own medication
No I refuse to be stuck
With this guilt, not anymore!

Chorus

spoken:
I won't sit here and let you destroy me!
Fuck!"

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Judas

"V1:​

You make me sick - elitist scum!
You're a traitor nothing more
It's the only way I can state it
You were our friend
All it took was a controlling whore
You turned on us, became a snake
We gave you our best and you lost out - took it for granted
While we were delivered from your greed
Because love and loyalty -
is a two way street
But you never reciprocate unless you stand to gain

Chorus:
You're a traitor
No better than Judas
Claimed you loved us
But you were loyal
Only to your wants
(To your needs)
Once we were no longer useful -
You turned away!
You turned against us!
Ran for your hills covered in moths and rust!

V2:
So you can say goodbye
It won't hurt us
We're more than happy
To be rid of a snake
You can mourn the loss
But we'll go back to living
Better to be rid of you
Rather than being used by you
You loved your money
Loved yourself
But money won't help you
When you're on the shelf - all by yourself.

Chorus

V3:
You can sink the knife in
You can twist it deep
(We'll rip it out)
You can take your shit and fuck off now!
We'll heal the hole
You'll be a slave - forever -
To your own desire
We'll be free because we know
How to love and how to be loved
Because we are loyal to people
Not to worthless gold

Chorus

V4:
You took your money
You took your girl
You took your ransom
But the jokes on you
Because you'll reap what you sowed
I can see it now
All of us old and tired
You'll be alone and sad
We'll have family
We'll have joy
We'll have life now!

Bridge:
Let it be known
You'll reap what you sew
Let it be known
Karma has no deadline
Let it be known
Your time will come
You'll die alone and old
Consumed with your greed and lust for power//

Chorus"​

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[swilow]

Hey man, of course this is allowed but I'm gonna shift it to our Words forum where it'll probably get more response