Madhouse Rant

Admired mind true blue tested tried or too tired
to think heated ink drink swallow drowning wired eyes

attempted blink boiled cough stained no refrain
gutter flooded winding oil street frown another claimed

become the pen offended find fires unattended
shrink lies rationalized ties burned remain mended

rendered folly null under sky brain cold pain
downtown rain slink beat ladies gaze profane

invested gents follow pink sunrise east
released scatter main event spent crowned defeat leash

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Wow i really digged this kinetic style. I would love some drum and base or breaks in the back ground to you speaking in this fashion.

become the pen offended find fires unattended
shrink lies rationalized ties burned remain mended

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that one is my favorite line.

I like the experimental spirit behind this, and the strong sense that each word is a 'unit'.

Thanks guys - I've revised and edited this piece since posting originally, resulting in a longer and more cohesive version. when i can find this final edit (fixed and printed on another comp hence no saved version) i will post it in this thread later tonight.