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I wrote this about my experience 8 years ago about taking opiates and drinking until I was completely numb. And how amazing it felt to me to stand on the back steps in the freezing cold at midnight and to feel so relieved to be completely numb to the pain I was in.
Standing alone on the back steps while the world sleeps
Pain and sadness begin to creep
The world is so still it seems to have died
The day has lost its fight with the night deride
It is so quiet you can hear the snow falling to its death
You can even hear the day taking its final breath
The menacing moon hangs fat and full
Somehow I feel its tidal pull
In the silent midnight hour the moonlight glows
On the freshly fallen snow
Frozen crystals desperately cling to immaciated branches high
That reach hopelessly towards the harsh night sky
Somewhere in the darkness a lone dog howls
Right here in my own darkness I cry
As my tears fall they freeze and shatter on the ground
No reprieve from my fears can be found
Been drinking away my overwhelming misery
A warmth is spreading through my body and my mind feels dizzy
My alcohol soaked and drug coated mind
Floats erratically from one thought to another time
I am so cold but I don't care
I am so sad but I don't care
No more tears no more pain
Because somewhere in the darkness my frozen heart stops beating and misery no longer reigns
I wrote this about my experience 8 years ago about taking opiates and drinking until I was completely numb. And how amazing it felt to me to stand on the back steps in the freezing cold at midnight and to feel so relieved to be completely numb to the pain I was in.
Standing alone on the back steps while the world sleeps
Pain and sadness begin to creep
The world is so still it seems to have died
The day has lost its fight with the night deride
It is so quiet you can hear the snow falling to its death
You can even hear the day taking its final breath
The menacing moon hangs fat and full
Somehow I feel its tidal pull
In the silent midnight hour the moonlight glows
On the freshly fallen snow
Frozen crystals desperately cling to immaciated branches high
That reach hopelessly towards the harsh night sky
Somewhere in the darkness a lone dog howls
Right here in my own darkness I cry
As my tears fall they freeze and shatter on the ground
No reprieve from my fears can be found
Been drinking away my overwhelming misery
A warmth is spreading through my body and my mind feels dizzy
My alcohol soaked and drug coated mind
Floats erratically from one thought to another time
I am so cold but I don't care
I am so sad but I don't care
No more tears no more pain
Because somewhere in the darkness my frozen heart stops beating and misery no longer reigns