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Om Blessed Nelumbo

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To the whispering film of smoke, that along the river choke
the very light from the air, Lay underneath the plume,
under the condensated looming, phosphorescent,
drifting eerily – a small Nelumbo bud.

Upon the Ganges lay, and drifted, as if in the clouds uplifted,
by the Priestess’ song; spirited!
In exultation to the Dead.
Still, behind the solemn craft, lay strewn (as if by hands, caste),
a solemn train of purple Cupids, juxtaposing all this death.

Yet the umbre could not detract, from the thud; from the thunder of a thousand voices , as if through odd dialects a Gregorian chant airborne,
And so as if drifting in the notes, on intermittent light-shards float, smoke-bound, Pachamamma’s petal ‘ d boats of defiance;
(though to the Dead, they make little difference).

Plaintively our flowers rest
Along the flaming shores of the embalmbed,
Purple then black, their beauty consumed,
Smouldering Heaven, a treaty, a treasure –
The Bless’d.
 
this was a beautiful, amazing read man, did you write this?

I'm very impressed with the correct grammar, and excellent use of punctuation and capitalization

such a mental picture these words paint is really calming and serene, and I get a sense that I want to actually see this place; were you inspired by real life events in this piece?
 
Thanks a lot man, yeah I wrote this one. There's a couple of minor mistakes with the grammar but I'll fix them when I re-draft. And yes, the inspiration goes back to when i was lucky enough to witness a Hindu cremation along the banks of the Ganges when I was much younger, it really was a scene of such beauty. Some things can only beggar likeness.

Looking forward to your novel!
 
Bro. this is sick. Very gorgeous. I really esteem this. I absolutely love the title.
 
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