Poetry look ma' no hands

[Snafu in the Void]

Watch this mom!
Now I will hold my breath
Watch the tremors manifest
in the game of life and death

Snafu's actually in the Void
for once in his life
one magnificent cacophonic reversal
of all the fight and strife

let nothing run through my mind
not even the chalky outline
of what once was my father figure
which only shapely fit my failure in time

One blissfully silent moment
without the torment from God
I've never felt anything like this
I'm feeling rather odd

What a special moment
I've never felt before
The silence is golden
and the dead no longer tour


i wish i put more effort into these poems they could be a lot better, story of my life...

I always say fuck it and give my poems shitty endings

 

[Mysterier]

let nothing run through my mind
not even the chalky outline
of what once was my father figure
which only shapely fit my failure in time

Love the phrasing here. Well done.

 

[cduggles]

The silence is golden
and the dead no longer tour

I particularly liked this couplet!